Carpe Diem Time Glass #30 summer solstice

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   From my Forest (@hamish_gunn)

   June 8, 2015

   Too many haiku all on one page makes it difficult to properly read and transition from one too the other.

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      thom amundsen

      June 8, 2015

      I get that, I understand it is a goal to connect the verse, but, I do appreciate the feedback and will continue to work on method … thank you

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   Karin

   June 8, 2015

   Poetic form is an art. I like grouped Haiku, it isn’t a technique I use often but I believe it effective when I (or anyone else) does. Lovely photo too!

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      thom amundsen

      June 8, 2015

      thanks Karin – it is all pretty experimental and I am always appreciate the feedback.

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   Björn Rudberg (brudberg)

   June 8, 2015

   I want to see them as separate haiku. The rhymes are interesting but can sound a little forced. My favorite is the second last.

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      thom amundsen

      June 8, 2015

      thanks – this is excellent feedback, just what I was looking for.

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   Ruchi Chopra

   June 8, 2015

   Loved this one ❤
   I am a simple

   soul of reckoning free will

   wild in love be still
   Keep writing…:-)

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      thom amundsen

      June 8, 2015

      thank you so much – I do hope to and your words are encouraging. 🙂

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