carpe diem time glass #30 summer solstice
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when I glance your way
solemn Your light on display
I welcome my day
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what lies beyond this
shadow maker noted bliss
stream ignorance, miss.
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I am a simple
soul of reckoning free will
wild in love be still
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oft I dream my day
will not ever fade away
when I glance your way
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Too many haiku all on one page makes it difficult to properly read and transition from one too the other.
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I get that, I understand it is a goal to connect the verse, but, I do appreciate the feedback and will continue to work on method … thank you
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Poetic form is an art. I like grouped Haiku, it isn’t a technique I use often but I believe it effective when I (or anyone else) does. Lovely photo too!
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thanks Karin – it is all pretty experimental and I am always appreciate the feedback.
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I want to see them as separate haiku. The rhymes are interesting but can sound a little forced. My favorite is the second last.
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thanks – this is excellent feedback, just what I was looking for.
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Loved this one ❤
I am a simple
soul of reckoning free will
wild in love be still
Keep writing…:-)
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thank you so much – I do hope to and your words are encouraging. 🙂
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