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Carpe Diem Time Glass #30 summer solstice

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carpe diem time glass #30 summer solstice
carpe diem time glass #30 summer solstice

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when I glance your way

solemn Your light on display

I welcome my day

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what lies beyond this

shadow maker noted bliss

stream ignorance, miss.

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I am a simple

soul of reckoning free will

wild in love be still

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oft I dream my day

will not ever fade away

when I glance your way

8 responses to “Carpe Diem Time Glass #30 summer solstice”

  1. From my Forest (@hamish_gunn) Avatar
    From my Forest (@hamish_gunn)

    Too many haiku all on one page makes it difficult to properly read and transition from one too the other.

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    1. thom amundsen Avatar
      thom amundsen

      I get that, I understand it is a goal to connect the verse, but, I do appreciate the feedback and will continue to work on method … thank you

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  2. Karin Avatar
    Karin

    Poetic form is an art. I like grouped Haiku, it isn’t a technique I use often but I believe it effective when I (or anyone else) does. Lovely photo too!

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    1. thom amundsen Avatar
      thom amundsen

      thanks Karin – it is all pretty experimental and I am always appreciate the feedback.

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  3. Björn Rudberg (brudberg) Avatar
    Björn Rudberg (brudberg)

    I want to see them as separate haiku. The rhymes are interesting but can sound a little forced. My favorite is the second last.

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    1. thom amundsen Avatar
      thom amundsen

      thanks – this is excellent feedback, just what I was looking for.

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  4. Ruchi Chopra Avatar
    Ruchi Chopra

    Loved this one ❤
    I am a simple

    soul of reckoning free will

    wild in love be still
    Keep writing…:-)

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    1. thom amundsen Avatar
      thom amundsen

      thank you so much – I do hope to and your words are encouraging. 🙂

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