whisper winds will ring
creature will sunrise alert
swift wound nature wing
glory to be life drawn
at sea beauty seems the same
yet sight sweet while yawn
stretch evening sight
her hello is with steady might
winds suggest our night
Carpe Diem Tokubetsudesu #49 at the seashore (Vision Quest reprise)
8 responses to “Carpe Diem Tokubetsudesu #49 at the seashore (Vision Quest reprise)”
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I still wish for more tutelage from that rule – I thought it was a standard with haiku, thus I continue to write with it … I appreciate any feedback public or private. thanks Hamish.
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thanks for your kind words 🙂
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Three wonderful haiku with great photos Thom. I like the classical way of writing haiku 5-7-5, but it makes the haiku (in my opinion) sometimes artificial. maybe you have to try to use less or more words in your haiku. For example your third haiku written in another way:
evening sight
with steady might
winds suggest our nightJust an idea.
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Thank you Chevrefeuille, all of you have opened doors with me regards style and context. 🙂
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A Theatre Website 
Please I would love you to share words, suggestions …